Writingーセンテンス数ー

タイトルのセンスな（thing)

今日はwritingのセンテンス数について

こんなもん、勝手にやれよといいたいところだけど

２０２１年第二回実用英語技能検定１級の模範解答より

Technological advancements have undoubtedly brought convenience to out lives. (1[9]) However, the commodification of personal data, digitization of society, and scarcity of laws have eroded our ability to protect individual privacy in the modern world. (2[25]) 【34】

   The Internet has paved the way for the accumulation and trading of data regarding users’ online habits (1[17]). Scandals involving the sale of users’ social media data, for example, are proof that our digital footprints are now lucrative commodities (2[21]). Moreover, penalties for selling data are a fraction of the revenues gained from the activity, which may incentivize corporations to continue violating people’s privacy (3/4[24]).【62】

   Additionally, as society becomes ever more digitized, individuals are being compelled to disclose more personal data (1[16]). Registering private information on governmental sites, for example, may afford citizens access to vital public services such as healthcare (2[19]). Once registered, however, it may not be possible for citizens to control how their data is used, thereby making the safeguarding of their personal details unfeasible.(3/4[26])【61】

  The struggle to maintain individual privacy is further exemplified by a conspicuous lack of legislation(1[15]). Devising and authorizing laws is a protracted process, requiring meticulous consideration (2[11]). The massive effort required to safeguard the huge amounts of data generated by our daily activities has left lawmakers struggling to keep up (3[23]).【49】

   Thus, in the face of capitalist greed and intrusive governance, both of which are escaping the reach of overwhelmed judicial systems, protecting individual privacy has become an important task(1[29]).【29】

(1)→センテンスナンバー

[1]→語数

Total【235wds】

トピックは10から２０でフォローイングセンテンスは15－25なんてきめておくといいかもしれないですね。本番は語数を正確にカウントしている暇がないからこれで慣れておくとだいたい200－2４０に収まるんじゃないかな。これからはそこの練習をしていきましょう。　

追記：

昨日のなぞだった、a protracted processでしたね。「長引くプロセス」

時間がかかる、面倒ってことですね。　

と考えると、３パラの２→３文は、３が２の理由となっている感じですね。つながりがある文章を書くのはなかなか難しいですね。日頃から論理的に物事を考える必要性を感じました。　

みなさんの人生に幸あれ。